Friday, 18 November 2011

New Episode 9: The Final Frontier

Even more happens in this episode! But again I managed to trim off about a third. I felt that there way too much detail in the original one, most of those details would be left for the script. I think that this is a great way of ending the series, and opens up opportunities for future series's, should the need arise.

New:
The ship warps into a distant orbit around the huge star. The crew are stunned by it's size. The captain asks SAI to scan the star, she informs them that due to it's size the star is relatively cool and charging will take longer than predicted. Noko suggests that with the power of the new reactor, and because of the low density of the star, that they could supercharge the ship by orbiting quickly inside the surface of the star. This causes an argument amongst the crew. The captain asks SAI if Noko's idea is possible, she confirms that the plan has a high chance of success. The captain tells her to take them inside the star, and the ship dives into the surface of the star, orbiting quickly. Alarms sound but SAI says shields are holding and energy is charging rapidly. With the alarms silences the captain asks the crew for suggestions on how to test the new technology. Noko says that the reactor is capable of taking them to another galaxy, where he has the coordinates for a star that his species knows harbors life. The crew are amazed by the opportunity, and Noko gives the coordinates to SAI. She explains that the journey will take several months. The captain looks at his crew and after a moments contemplation tells her to take them there. The engines power up and the ship shoots out from the star and to their distant destination.

Old:
The ship warps into a distant orbit from the huge star VY Canis Majoris, the hugest star the crew has ever seen. SAI informs the captain that because of it's size the star in actually relatively cool and the charging will take a very long time. The captain asks SAI to scan the star while he thinks, SAI begins to relay the information as usual. Noko suggests that  because of the stars extremely low density that with the new output of the reactor, it should be able to sustain the shields and allow them to actually enter the star, which would speed up the charging considerably. This starts an argument from the crew, the engineer in particular is still suspicious of his reasons for helping the human crew. The captain asks SAI if Noko's idea is possible, she responds saying that if the ship was to maintain the shields and an extremely fast orbit inside the atmosphere of the star that there is a high chance the ship will escape unharmed. Noko admits he hadn't considered escape velocity, but that the plan was now a complete certainty. The captain agrees and tells SAI to take them inside the star, the engine power up and the ship appears to begin flying past the star before diving into the surface at extremely high speed. Alarms sound due to the stress on the shields, SAI says that shields appear to be holding and that energy is charging rapidly. The captain asks the crew for suggestions for what to do to test out the new reactor now that it's at full. Noko says that the reason that he has given them this technology is that his species have known of life in another galaxy, but they are themselves unable to travel outside of this galaxy because of their method of propulsion, hence their interest in the humans who given enough energy would be able to journey there. The crew are amazed by this revelation and the opportunity to journey to another galaxy, Noko gives the coordinates to SAI, she explains that the journey itself there will take several weeks. After a moment of contemplation the captain tells SAI to take them there. The engines power up and the ship shoots out from the huge star and to it's distant destination.

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