New title for the episode, I couldn't resist!
Ok so I decided on a 13 line limit for my synopsies... Not so tough for now, but might get more difficult for some of the beefier episodes... I may up the limit if I feel it's really needed for some, but as a guideline I'm going to aim for 13... The aim was 10 lines, which I achieved but converting to Courier made it 13, still acceptable in my opinion.
New:
The ship arrives at Sirius, a bright blue star double the size of our sun. SAI begins to scan the star as the crew stare in amazement. As they orbit another much smaller white star slowly begins to appear over the horizon of Sirius. After gathering energy from and scanning Sirius the ship moves on to the smaller star, which the crew underestimate because of it's size. SAI informs them that it was originally more than double the size of the larger Sirius and despite it's small size the surface temperature is more than triple than that of Sirius. Amazed by the news that small stars can be so powerful the crew excitedly begin to shout direction at SAI to fly to another small powerful star, SAI looks to the captain for confirmation as the engines power up. The captain replies with a nod and the ship shoots off to it's next destination.
Old:
The ship arrives at Sirius, 8 lightyears
away from Earth the star appears blue rather than orange and is double
the size of our Sun. The crew, initially amazed by the bright blue glow
begin to scan the star as they orbit around it. Slowly another much
smaller white star, about the size of Earth comes into view around the
horizon of the large Sirius. After gathering data and energy from the
large star the ship moves to look at the second smaller star, which most
of the crew underestimate. After scanning has begun SAI informs the
crew that the star was previously more than double the size of Sirius
and because of this burned out much faster, and despite it's size the
surface temperature of the small star is actually almost triple that of
the larger star. All of the crew apart from the captain are surprised
that such a small star could still output so much energy and heat, the
crew excited by this start to shout at SAI orders to move to the nearest
white dwarf star to them, SAI looks around to the captain and says
"Sir?" as the engines begin to ready, to which he nods and the ship
shoots off to it's next destination.
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